Jailed for Life After Crimes as Teenagers-Adam Liptakhttp://www.nytimes.com/2005/10/03/national/03lifers.htmlRhetorical Analysis: Are You Serious?Wow, I don't think I have ever been so shocked to have read the opening line of an article before, okay maybe that was an exaggeration. But seriously: 9,700 American prisoners serving life sentences? Reading the last story really took me off-guard I would never imagine him getting a life sentence. When I was 14 years old I was doing all sorts of stupid things. Maybe my friends weren't killing people but if the circumstances were different I could not say that maybe I wouldn't have gone to steal something just for the sheer excitement. We all do dumb things, his just went too far, which from the sounds of it was not his fault.
Okay, well that is the content but as for the rhetorical anaylsis of this article. Frankly, I think Liptak (the author) could have made this article a much more intense, interesting article. It was extremely important to put in statistics in an article like this but was it necessary to put so many redundant statistics, some of which were worded extremely awkwardly: "In those same years, the number of juveniles sentenced to life peaked in 1994, at about 790, or 15% of all adults and youths admitted as lifers that year."
Liptak also added a comment about race and sex on the 2nd page. The fact was very interesting but he didn't go any further to anaylze what consequences this has on either arguement (for or against juvenile life sentences). I was pretty sure I learned in high school not to introduce statements unless they were relevant to the topic at hand, and
why they are relevant.
ALSO, I had a huge problem with the comments by Ms. Falcon. I almost stopped reading the article when I read, "I started listening to rap music and wearing my pants baggy. I was like a magnet for the wrong crowd."
Oh please, I listen to rap music and I don't think any of my friends have shot anyone? That is extremely stereotypical. There are many reasons I could say that she fell into the wrong crowd, after only reading this article: not supervised enough, self-confidence issues, coming from a broken family. But the only reason she can come up with is because she listens to rap? Her mother came upon the same conclusion, which makes me want to say to them both: You make your own desicions. She chose to be friends with whomever she was friends with and it had nothing to do with what she wore, or what kind of music she listened to.
Although the content of the article was interesting and brough up many issues I didn't even realize
were issues, I did have trouble sticking it all the way through the article. Maybe I'm reading too deep into things or am completely off, but both Liptak and Ms. Falcon may want to work on their sentence structures and word choices.
I thought I'd add a rating from now on to my rhetorical analyses.
Content: 8
Ease of reading/ Rhetoric: 5
Overall: 6